That sounds like such a wonderful relationship! I would never want it to end
Not wordy, well described. The pacing really works well to tease as well as fill in the backstory at the same time. It definitely sets up that feeling of pressure and finally shamefully release...
I am glad you both like it. I am not really concerned about the word count, but I like to think of my captioning as an exercise in microfiction. Obviously the story needs a certain number of words to be told, but before I post I am always remembering my Saint-Exupéry : "perfection is reached not when there is nothing left to add, but when there is nothing left to take away".Recently I am finding that I have already explored all the little fantasies that are both interesting to me and able to be expressed well in five sentences (e.g. fs21-002 and fs21-003) therefore I am using more words.None of this is a problem, but when I layout the final cap I see more and more space devoted to text, and it catches my attention. Now I am now a bit embarrassed to have admitted that I think so much about my silly little captioning hobby. Anyway, once again I am glad you enjoy them.
Also, just to clarify, these are just guidelines I set for myself in order to achieve the kind of goals I want to achieve with my captioning. I see others striving for their own very worthy and impressive goals with longer form fiction. I just realized that my earlier comment could appear very preachy as if "short is the only/best way". That isn't true at all.